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Review:JLHufflepuff says:
Wow!

I love your characterization of Severus in this. The whole time that I was reading, I was wondering how Lily fit in this scheme, so at the end when he died I had some strange reason to think that his death may have had to do with her, though I didn't expect the Unbreakable Vow even though you foreshadowed that revelation quite well. I was shocked when Snape died because the story didn't seem to be going in such a shocking direction!

I love Dumbledore in this, as well. I think his allusion to his love life was well-timed. I like that he was kind of Sev's advisor about the matter, though I think him actually encouraging him to sleep with her was a bit unbelievable. Still, I absolutely love all the statements he made about Snape denying himself too many pleasures... Very profound.

I also like the background about Narcissa and Lucius and how she is afraid to be alone. Being a woman who hates to be alone, I can really identify with that. You portray her as human even though she's still a pureblood snob. A desperate, human woman. How embarassing for her when it all came out, I'm sure.

This is a very original idea. I tend not to like stories to be so long, but I understand since this is a collaboration you obviously had to make it a one-shot. Anyway, I'm very impressed!

Author's Response: All I can say about Snape’s death was kind of a surprise to me when the story took that turn. I think that’s part of what makes writing so exciting.

As to your comment that “I think [Dumbledore] actually encouraging him to sleep with her was a bit unbelievable” – I worried about this, except that I actually thought of this in terms of “my” Dumbledore coming off as channeling Zorba the Greek (“God has a very big heart but there is one sin he will not forgive. If a woman calls a man to her bed and he will not go.”)

I appreciate your comments about Narcissa. You picked up on the aspects of her personality that tended to resonate for me and that I tried to write about. And, yes, the untold parts that would follow – that the story would come out in some form, that it would be scandalous and horribly humiliating for her and her family, would be implied. (As would the fact that Moody and Shacklebolt, after leaving Dumbledore, went directly to the nearest tavern, toasted Snape for the first and only times in their lives, and wished that when it came time for each man to go out, he could exit in the very same way.)

Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I appreciate it deeply -- the time you have taken to read my story, your insightful comments, and your kind encouragement.


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