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Review:burnt august says:
Alrighty, here I am :]

I think this a lovely story, I've always wondered about the story behind Remus and Tonks. First of all, I didn't notice any spelling/grammatical mistakes, so you're good as far as technical mistakes. I do think you have room for a bit more description, granted this is only a one-shot and rather short so I think you could add some more in.

As for characterization, I think you did a good job on both Tonks and Remus. I would have liked to see a bit more of Remus' dry sense of humor though :] The ending was funny too, typical Fleur to ruin a moment! I think the story flowed very naturally, so you're good for that too. I would recommend perhaps showing a bit more of Tonks eccentric personality though!

Good job!
9/10
August Embers

Author's Response: Ok, I totally get what you mean about the description. I mean, for the Writer's Duel, there was a word-limit, but I definitely think it'd be a good idea to go back in and edit in some more descriptions and the like.

I also get what you mean about Remus' sense of humor. The only problem is that I'm not a particularly funny person. The only kind of the humor that I can get into fics is really forced, but I'll see what I can do.

Thanks for reviewing!

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