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Review:Elysium says:
Majikat

That was… decadent. And yet even that cannot sum it up. To be honest I was wholly affected by this one-shot – it was singularly one of the most absorbing pieces I have read. It was, as we had previously discussed, like poetry in motion. Exquisite.

I’m very familiar with the myth of Paris and the three Goddesses and I have to say I love how you drew inspiration from it without using it as a basis for the story. You painted her need, her desperation so vividly, it was as though I felt each quickening thrum of her heart as my own. It’s a very powerful impact, I tell you.

Much like his father, you have portrayed a beautiful Scorpius (he does make a great Helen doesn’t he lol). His beauty is pain, and it’s wonderful all the same.

Your attention to detail was wonderful, this was exactly the type of writing I had hoped for in setting this challenge – sheer attention to physical and emotional sensation. And your descriptions were both simple and complex at the same time.

For example the sheer bareness of this line: She melted into him like butter; his lips were her lips, his arms, his fingers, his breath, hers really got me.

It was like you painted a whole other world that was separate to the one that their family and friends lived in. I particularly loved your opening: But a close-knit family, the love her parents lavished on her at every opportunity, could not compare to the feeling of him. it just sang of obsession and infatuation so clearly.

I’m going to stop gushing now :P But truly Kate, even for you, this was exceptional.

xox Kylie

Note: Now in terms of the results of the challenge, I had intended to notify everyone today but unfortunately have just run into a little blip along the way one of the entrants. As such I cannot post the results just now (it will likely be a few more days in which case I shall PM you all) but I did feel it was time to post all of the reviews. The reason for the delay is that I wanted to post all reviews at the same time for fairness really… that and a pinch of procrastination.

Author's Response: kylie! sorry its taken so long to respond to this - you know ive been busy ^_^

decadent...wow. thank you. i would never use that word to describe my writing. im ..wow. thanks ^_^

scor makes the perfect helen!!! i really wanted to reverse the roles and give rose this burning need to be with him. something so strong she would risk everything for it.

glad you liked that line! im quite fond of it, lol

im so happy you liked it hun!! it was wonderful to write and a real challenge indeed. it forced me to concentrate on the other senses, which was great!

*hugs* Kate


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