First, this has been an interesting read so far (I'm still reading, I just decided to start reviewing as I go along). The first sentence that really caught me was: And that she was all alone. Gosh, you really managed to make me see things through Narcissa's eyes. I've never done that before and I really enjoy it.
Oh, I adore your writing, like this here: As I said, the episode with Draco was, well, it was a fiasco. I'm really intrigued by the way you manage to capture their voices... and the reluctant attraction between Narcissa and Snape, even when it's almost non-existent. ^_^
Also, I find your dialogue very elegant and refined. It's interesting to read Snape and Dumbledore's conversation when both of them speak as though they knew their manners (and this is a compliment, it doesn't seem forced at all). I can only assume that you're joking. This is what I mean. What a lovely, funny way to put it. ^_^ Snape gripping his chair... I love you!! ^_^
Wow, seriously, you bring out new things of thsese characters, giving them thoughts, feelings and past experiences, making them living breathing beings. I adore your Dumbledore. I'm sorry if I sound like a broken record, but this story is really good.
It's strange how vulnerable Narcissa seems, and childish somehow. And yet, she's a mother who loves her child, woman who wants to feel loved. Narcissa felt giddy... When we make decisions, how hard they might be, we feel light afterwards. ^_^ Oh, I do love this.
I'm actually laughing also. Having so much fun while reading it. It's scented. Poor Snape. Oh, I so love Dumbledore and Snape, chatting together. Their relationship is such a unique one. And oh my god, Snape is adorable. NEVER in my wildest dreams have I thought that Snape is adorable, yet you make him like that, nervous... Ah! (and in a perfect way, not some OOC way, mind you).
One correction: too-good-to-breath-the-same... etc. should be breathe. ^_^ Second correction: "Will there any problem at all." should probably have a verb in it, be perhaps.
Ohhoh, what a lovely kissing scene. Made shivers run across my skin. ^_^ Wow. ^_^ AND WHOA!! You... just did not do that. I'm not going to say it here now because others mind read it before reading your story. THAT was surprising. Gah!
And what an ending. This has probably been the most surprising story I've ever read. Beautiful, sad and... witty, intelligent. Thank you for sharing your work. Wow!
Author's Response: Sometimes you just want to dance around the room. I must confess your review made me feel that way.
I’m delighted that you felt I had some success in capturing the characters’ voices. The dialogue for Dumbledore and Snape was quite hard, because we don’t see many scenes (and we don’t see protracted scenes) of Snape and Dumbledore in private conversation.
“The first sentence that really caught me was: And that she was all alone”
I do think that Narcissa has things going on that, from a human perspective, make her sympathetic. For a woman who is basically a wife and mother to lose her husband to prison and then see her child turned into cannon fodder, all in the space of a few weeks, would be a devastating blow. You don’t really have your head on straight under those circumstances.
“It's strange how vulnerable Narcissa seems, and childish somehow. And yet, she's a mother who loves her child, woman who wants to feel loved.”
That’s exactly how I wanted her to come across. For the reasons in the preceding paragraph, I think Narcissa is extremely vulnerable.
“ and oh my god, Snape is adorable.”
I was not consciously going for adorable, but I love this description.
Regarding the typos: Thank you so much for noticing. No matter how hard you try to catch everything, some errors always manage to get through.
“AND WHOA!! You... just did not do that.” (I loved reading that!) Yup. I did. I’m bad.
Thank you so, so much for your wonderful review.