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Review:Labby says:
Wow, I really liked this! It was a nice feel good story (well except for the case of course), but it was a nice Lily/James story. I kind of liked how you had Lily and James meeting for the first time and still falling in love. I just like that it's different from the usual James loving Lily forever thing. I like how they bonded and came together.

The main criticism that I have is that I would have preferred this to be a short story, written in a couple of different chapters, maybe seperating it by a couple of days at a time. It seemed like more of a short story than a one-shot and it could have had a little more detail if it went on to be a short story. Again, there was a lot of dialogue in the story, and it would be nice to see more detail. Also, I would havel liked to see that article that Lily wrote. :)

Anyways, I thought this was a nice story. Great job with it!

Author's Response: yeah the case wasn't very feel good-happy, was it? lol. and evry glad to hear that you liked the fact that they just met then as i'm extremely fond of writing AU fics and i thought that this would be a fun way to solve the ase rather then them being exes or something

as for the critique, i totally get where you're comign from, and it was actually somethign that i struggled with once i finished the fic (at first i thought it'd be like 10 pages or somethign, but then, out of nowhere, it turned out to be a whopping 22 pgs lol). i tried to seperate it, but it just didnt work out as well in my opinion (it was completed then, and done with the intention of bing a one shot, so seperating it anywhere felt... wrong)

i am really tryign to work on beign more detailed with my writing so thnak you so much for pointing that out, i may very well go back and totally re-write this into a short story

thank you so mcuh for this

p.s. forgot to respond to the article comment-- i tried to write it and even wrote a few exampless of it, but just didnt liek the feel of it that much... probably will try again though ;)


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