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Review:Elysium says:
Wow, Sami, I am officially rendered speechless. This was an incredibly powerful piece! The way you captured the extremes of human emotion was quite shattering.

And the end! - I don't even know what to say other than that the last line "And from her lips, he drew the, 'Hallelujah." was sheer perfection. I love this song and it tied in seemlessly with your words.

There's something powerful about writing without a fully set plan in mind - the story tracks your own thoughts and emotions in a way that it cant when its planned out entirely.

As you know I am a big fan of the elusive, unpinned style of narrative in which no names are given and you executed it so very well. This truly was a beautiful piece. Thank you so much for the dedication!

xox Kylie

P.S I spotted two references to chocolate eyes :P

Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much Bammers. You truly do spoil me, do you know that?

The end line was...well you know that I changed the ending just so I could use that line. I never really listened to this song before, but when I heard it yesterday, this story immediatly started to form in my mind and I had to write it down :D.

I think we are both big fans of the unpinned style of narrative. It just gives away so much more freedom, and it really helps the writing flow. Also, it helps convey emotion far better when 'he' is used instead of 'his name.'

As for the chocolate eyes, well, I asked myself how he would think of them, and yeah, thats all I could come up with. So, I might not be the most descriptive romantic, bite me :P

Thanks for the review :D

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