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Review:Unwritten Curse says:
Ron and Luna? That's not a pairing used often. I don't really see them together, personally, but I am interested in seeing what you will do with them. Maybe you'll prove me wrong, and I'll grow to like their pairing. (:

Your writing is nice. The descriptions of the weather, emotions, etc. were appropriate and flowed along wonderfully. There were a couple words that sort of broke the rythm, like 'huge' in the second paragraph. It just seemed like an elementary word to me. But that may be just me.

The whole arranged marraige thing doesn't sit well with me. Why on earth would the Malfoys want Draco to marry a Weasley? The Weasleys are bloodtraitors and are shunned by much of the pureblooded world. But maybe you have a perfectly good reason and in that case I'll shut up. (:

Good work, though. Truly. A good chapter. Did I mention the dialogue was nicely done? No, don't think so. Well, the dialogue is nicely done. (: It doesn't seemed forced. Kudos.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Your review has completely made my day!

I can see what you mean about broken rythms in the writing, and I'm definitely going to fix that.

As for the Malfoys, so far, it alludes everyone, except for our girl who sleuths it out.

Thank you again for your review! It was wonderful!


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