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Review:completelyinsane says:
Wow, this is the first fanfiction I read in a long time. I picked it out because I loved the description of the story, it really caught my attention. And I'm not usually drawn to Marauders/Past HP fanfictions. ^^

One of the things I loved about this is that it was written so much differently than JK Rowling -- but in a good way. Your writing technique draws more of the characters', or in this case, character's, feelings. You kind of get inside of their head and write perfectly about it. Another thing is, this just occured to me, was that you matched JKR's statement perfectly where Lupin just wants to feel wanted and doesn't think he fits in. I'm not sure where that statement was, but I know she said it.

And of course, I have to give constructive criticism, because I love to give it, and writers benefit with criticism. There isn't too much to criticize about but only a few small details. Some of your characters like Grayback and Sirius sound a little too polite. Like Fenrir does sound gruff and Sirius is nice though, you may want to give them a little bit more of ... eh, attitude.

So, yeah, that's just my little blurb from me. Thanks if you're reading this. xD

Author's Response: Awe, thanks so much! Another motivational review! Yay!

I see what you're saying about Greyback and Sirius, though my intention for Greyback being nice and understanding comes in future chapters (probably not for a while, though). =D

Thanks again!

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