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Review:Girldetective85 says:
Hey! How are you? :) I'm finally here to review your story.

Okay, I'm confused. This was a beautiful George/Alicia fanfiction, but it is told by Alicia the whole way through, is it not? Then why, at the beginning, is she hugged by someone named Alicia? Did you mean Angelina? Here it is: "He chuckles and smiles down to me. Then he moves away, and I’m hugged by his brother, and then Alicia." I just got a little thrown off by that.

In this sentence "Fred! My heart snaps cleanly in two. My best friend! The brother to my bestest friend." I don't think "bestest" is a word, how about replacing it with dearest?

Otherwise, the spelling and grammar were in good shape. I think this is the first George/Alicia story I've read, and their relationship is very sweet and believable. I love that they named their son Fred at the end, I think it's something both of them would definitely do to honor him.

Nice job! :)

Author's Response: Thanks. Yeah, I meant Angelina *hitsselfinhead* that was stupid :P

thanks for the review, i'll fix it up when i get time

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