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Review:JLHufflepuff says:
Oooh.. a long one-shot, but it's divided by Roman numerals which helps me out a lot!

I - I love the way you convey emotion through simple facts. Your writing style is very strong and concise. The backstory you are beginning to tell is very well done! I love the idea that she had learned to hide her emotions, and I wonder who "he" is. I'm scared that it's Voldy, but I'm trying to keep an open mind. So far I'm loving it!!!

II - At first I thought that MAYBE, just maybe, this elusive man was Dumbledore, but you introduced the character of Tiberius. I love the way you set up their dialogue. You don't slow it down by adding in unnecessary description. You keep it pared down, and I think that it has a more emotional impact that way. This really builds up some of the background for the solitary Minerva that we see in the series. She has a complicated love, but she still feels passion and uses logic and self-control to keep her real feelings from interfering with her life.

III - This scene is just so well-done I can't really think of a lot to say.. I love the phrase, "The idea of need was one I couldn’t grasp when it came to him." It sums up her whole identity, almost. I really like that Dumbledore was there for her and comforted her just by being there and not leaving her alone. I don't know if you wrote this prior to the outing of Dumbly, but that scene also has more significance because Dumbledore is one of few people who probably knew exactly how Minerva felt.

Anyway, I'm glad you requested this review. Your writing is just - superb, amazing, and any other synonyms that I coudl think of. GREAT JOB!


Author's Response: First of all, thank you very much for looking over this and giving such a detailed review. I really appreciate it. :)

I find it incredibly interesting that you thought the mysterious man was Dumbledore - it easily could have been, and it builds up some suspense that I didn't intentionally put there. :P The scene with Dumbledore at the end was tacked on as an afterthought - not only did it bring the story full circle, but it was a nice touch to slip him in as an understanding figure once JKR released her news, haha. That last scene can be read without knowing the news too, but with it, there's a totally new meaning latched onto the story. :)

Once again, thank you an incredibly huge amount for reviewing, and enjoying, this story. It means a lot that you liked it so much and I'm glad there weren't any major problems with the story. ^_^


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