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Review:infested_with_NaRgLeS_14 says:
Ahh cliffhangers I HATE them (fun to write not to read, as you know I am not a paciente person)! I liked it, the viewpoints are kinda of confusing because it just swaps back and forth and random times. Try putting their names above the section where the point of view switches just to clear it up. Now down to the Jenny vs. Andrea smack down of would Snape act like that. I see both points. What I would do is write how Lily can see this emotional struggle Snape is going through (to hug her and actually show emotions which is very un-Snape, or to put his usual wall of indifference, which is how he usually is). It would be interesting b/c Lily would get all sorts of doubts b/c she cares about Snape. I dunno it'd be cool. Oh and I loved the way you wrote the anguish James was showing. It was nice how u incorporated his school boy rivalries and his hate of how Snape used to treat his wife. Overall it was a pleasant chapter, kinda confusing but good.

Author's Response: Haha you'll have to keep reading. I have taken your advice and placed names in the point of view sections. Haha the Andrea vs. Jenny smackdown. Well I was thinking that I know Snape always hides his emotions, but in the book, in the fashbacks he never seemed to hide them from Lily there's just something about her that brings his guard down. Thank you so much Blayne I am really glad you liked it and I will definetely work on the confusing part.

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