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Review:Last Laugh says:
I found this story to be an entertaining read. Since Peter Pettigrew is my favorite Marauder, I'm always looking for new material about him, and, I've got to say, it's pretty hard to find. As delighted as I am to have discovered another piece about him, I do have a few criticisms.



I found this story to be painfully short. It deserved a lot more elaboration. For some reason, the pace was all too fast. I think it could've been longer and more detail-attentive.



Also, I'm not sure that the Sorting Hat dwelled long enough on its decision. I personally believe that Peter is a Gryffindor not because he has the potential for bravery, but because he possesses disloyalty, a very Gryffindor-esque trait. Note that in the books the Slytherin students remained constantly loyal to their teachers and the adults to Voldemort, while Harry's fellow classmates changed their opinion on him at any moment they had the chance to. Slytherins are more stubborn and less likely to sway, while Gryffindors are constantly moving, somewhat reckless people. However, I respect that it's your story and, hence, your decision as to the Sorting Hat's motivations.



That said, I thought it was quite a fun story to read. While I did disagree with some points, I did enjoy it, and I hope you don't take offense from this review.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I agree that this is a very short piece, if memory serves me correctly, it's somewhere around 800 words. Part of the reason it's so short is that it felt too stretched out when I had written more words. I admit that one of my problems as a writer is that I am often unable to add great length and details to my stories. I prefer to use shorter sentences that don't have as much detail as they could have. I'm glad you pointed that out.

As far as his reasoning for being Sorted into Gryffindor, I (as you have read) think that the potential for bravery would weigh more in the Hat's mind than his disloyalty. I've always imagined that the Hat was, for lack of a better term, 'programmed to search for certain traits in people. As a gryffindor, that Hat would search for bravery or the potential of bravery. I say potential bravery because courage is not so much the lack of being afraid, but the will to continue on even if you are afraid. The Hat was imagining that Peter had a stronger will than he demonstrated in the books. The hat was measuring whether or not Peter would be brave as opposed to if he was. As disloyalty is not a trait the hat was 'programmed' to look for, I doubt that it would place him in gryffindor for that reason.

Slytherins, in my mind, only stay loyal becasuse they can gain something from it. Yes, they are people too and can be loyal regardless, but one of the main traits of the slytherin is to be cunning and ambitious. All too often ambition leads to other people being stepped on in order to move up. I believe that part of the reason some of the Death Eaters stayed loyal to the Dark Lord was because they were afraid not to. you'll notice that Lucius, Nott, Avery and several others were talked down to in GoF because they moved on when Voldemort fell. As with all groups of people, there are the loyal ones, Bellatrix included. However, in a general view, I'd tend to think that slytherins aren't always as loyal as you seem to hint that they are.

I'm glad you thought this was a fun story and that you enjoyed it! And thank you very much for leaving this review, as you can see, I like to ramble about my stories and you gave me plenty to ramble about! Thank you!


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