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Review:bellanator says:
This was beautiful! I've never read a Snape/Lily story before, I don't know what I was expecting.

After reading DH, I wondered alot how Snape and Lily continued to carry on their friendship through some of the years, and your piece is very realistic in regards to it. I could perfectly picture the two in your writing. I particularly like the last line, it's really powerful ...

Snape is a bittt out of character. He seems like a very calm sort of boy. I think it was the way you described him running his finger along the books. It seems like a very absent minded action, I just can't see the teenage Snape doing anything like that. Other than that, I could see him having that immense love for Lily and needing her presence. I'm not too sure about the breaking down thing. And the tears. But then again ... eehh, I guess I could sway my opinion. Okay, well, the way you wrote it, I could believe it. I could believe Snape having such a connection with Lily that when she just ended their friendship like that, he would break down. But, outside the story, I just couldn't see him doing that ... unless I think of the chapter in DH about him.

He's a very strong character in your piece though, I'll definately give you that. You leave nothing untouched when it concerns him. The 'kissing Lily' action seems like the perfect bid for the last minute mind change ... It fitted well.

Nice descriptions of Lily ... The way it pained her to break up their friendship. I loved your use of dialogue, you have the perfect mixture of descriptions, dialogue, characterisation ... I love the way you write.

Other than the Snape queries, a beautiful piece, which deserves nothing less than a 10.

bella xx

Author's Response: OK, so I can understand why you think Snape is out of character here; we are so used to reading about him being calm and composed, and only lashing out if absolutely necessary. I can picture him as a rather absent-minded teenager, acting oddly and unlike his adult self. I believe that the events of this story could have lead him to be how he is in Harry's time, because Lily was such an important part of his life and he can no longer be with her. I think that was enough to break him for a while, and then cause him to eventually harden over time. Does that make him seem more in character? =]

Other than that, I am so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review, Bella!


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