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Review:GubraithianFire says:
Another absolutely wonderful chapter from you, Trix. Skillfully done, indeed.

Last chapter, as most first chapters are, was indubitably expositional, showing us the resigned personal - for wont of a better word - relationship between the two main characters. This chapter was more professional, a little more polished, a little more frosty - all of which is more suitable for this reality-centered section. And when I say reality, I mean... I can't explain it properly, but it just centers more on daily life, on the pressures of the every day world - do you know what I mean? At any rate, you once again started the chapter with would-be innocent banter, this time between Kingsley and Ginny. You always mention in the beginning how Ginny yearns for excitement as a change from the monotony of her adult world. I really loved how you portrayed Kingsley, how he doesn't favor her just because of previous familiarity, how he insists on getting the job done. And, again, you use a fixed staple of life to bring about another topic: in this case, you chose coffee, certainly appropriate, considering the workplace setting in the beginning of the chapter. Very well done there, I really loved the coffee talk. (I happen to agree with Ginny - I wholeheartedly prefer tea.)

The middle section delves deeper into what disarray Draco's life has been thrown into; I would love to see that contrast with Ginny's real personal life. Every detail was very well thought out, and my personal favorite was how paint chips fall off the door whenever Ginny knocks. It was very insightful, very personal, and I loved how even in the midst of his parole officer, Draco refuses to change. You've painted him as a very stubborn, nearly to the point of laziness. I really, really loved that. There were two parts I particularly liked: Ginny lying to him, and Ginny putting Draco in a curse resembling the Imperius Curse. What makes both parts all the better is that she feels a little vindictive towards her childhood bully but still feels a little pity, if you could call it that. I just makes her feel so much more complex, and I loved seeing that.

I also wanted to talk about the inclusion, or the absence, of Lucius and Narcissa. What I found most intriguing was the detail that Andromeda and Narcissa have reconciled. Ordinarily, I would think this improbable, but the way you have portrayed this world makes it completely believable, and I commend you for that. And, on a related note, the way Draco is denied all but the most mediocre of his rightful belongings shows, again, the flaws in this society. What is also thought-provoking is that he almost pleads with Ginny on not working at a meager bookshop. I'd love to see this concept elaborated in the future, but the way you wrote the scene makes me think you shall.

The same goes for what you did during the interview. I just really, really loved that section. The exchange - or lack thereof - between Pennifold and Draco was very well done. I can't explain what it is that makes it so astonishing, but it feels, again, so well-characterized, so real. Absolutely delightful. And that last image, Draco leaving Ginny in the street, was absolutely unforgettable. I love that sort of thing, and you handled it with such nonchalance and yet so much weight, becuase it is at this point that we see, coupled with the last part in the first chapter, how much each of them is infuriated by the other, and from this I see even more tension. I'm so excited to see how exactly you write the future chapters, simply because of how great you've done with these! ;) You're doing splendidly, my friend, and I will definitely be looking forward to seeing more of where this is going!

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