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Review:norapotter says:
Wow this was wonderful.

I was a pretty sad when i found out that "Story of a Deatheater" was mature. I have been looking back weekly to see if it has been changed or if you had written anything else. Imagine my joy when i found that you HAD done something else! I read it and gobbled up each word eager for more. good writing.

I just wanted to say that this upcoming paragraph really affected me. "How could he forget? It’s not easy to forget when a part of you dyes away. This wasn’t merrily a game, this was real life. Fred Weasley wouldn’t laugh his musical laugh anymore, or grin mischievously when he thought of something clever. Nor would he ever even breathe. He was truly gone and nothing anyone did could change that. George sighed deeply and returned his focus to the present. He looked around and his eyes involuntarily went to the door. He remembered, with a horrible jerk, of the day he and Fred had first walked into here. They had been so happy that day. They had promised each other to spend the rest of their lives selling jokes, together." Though it was the second paragraph i already had tears in my eyes. And it was really good that you introduced the situation right in the beginning. That is something good authors do. But i did want to let you know about the spelling error. merrily a game did you mean merely? Other than that that was a wonderful paragraph.

I love how you had George go from depressed to back to his normal joking self. You did that beautifuly. I especially liked the end. You wove such a wonderful theme into this writing. I love how, after all that he's been through, George is the one consoloing and giving advise to his mom. wonderful!

I do want to ask you something though. You may have noticed that on my authors page i have begun to write the status of each of my stories and i have one mentioning a one-shot that's only about 1/4 written called "No Joke." That was going to be a lot like this. Except it was going to focus on the business in the joke-shop. George is mourning. He is also having trouble with getting his jokes made well and he can't follow a single recipe. But as soon as he actually faces the fact that his twin is gone and accepts it he is able to move on with his life and he CAN follow the recipes and the jokeshop flourishes. I wanted to ask you permission if i could still do it since you have a oneshot very much like what i was going to write. Although, I am very honoursed that I thought up something so close to noraxslytherin's idea without even knowing it. (Great Minds Think Alike! What an honour!) lol! Ok i will stop all this babbling and give you my score before going strait back to the story and adding it to favorites.
10/10


Author's Response: first off, OMG THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE WONDERFULLY LONG REVIEW!!!!!!!!! i woke up, checked my reviews quickly, found this, and screamed. :P THANKS!!

and i think im going to change it from Mature to 15+, because its honestly only Mature because she cut herself. you know the 2nd chapter when she did it? well, i changed it to Mature then because i wasnt sure about the rating, and thought i should just be on the safe side. but i shall change it. XD

eek! a spelling mistake. thank you! i'll fix it. :D and im so happy i got tears in your eyes. ;]

thank you!!! i wanted Mrs.Weasley to get back to her worried self a bit. and then George having to make her better.

LOL! you make me feel like a pro writer! hehe, i love it! but dont worry, i know a lot of people were gonna do something like this, and you have my total permission, not that you need it anyway. i bet you'll do beautifully with the whole thing and i cant wait to see it!!!!! and i love the title!!! good luck with it, and write it quick please, i really wanna see it!! :D

thanks again!!!!!!


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