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Review:Blue Flame says:
Alrighty, criticism first.

i'm really not sure of the tense you have here, its confusing, and sometimes you switched it in random areas. Also, Draco was OOC, I understand you want him to talk to Ginny, but you have to be careful not to make him to soft, he is a Malfoy after all, you know? I also think it could have been a little more descriptive, but thats just me, as I love descriptions. a little side note, the dialogue seemed a little forced and too formal, I think it would have been a little more tense and informal, she is mourning Harry after all. Despite this, i whooped at their encounter, I am a Ginny/Draco shipper, so naturally I LOVED the graveyard scene.

All in all, not bad, but it could use some work, I would reccomend a beta and a quick sweep through, add a couple sentences and try not to make Draco so...soft and emotional..i dont know how else to describe it.

A quick word of apology for taking so long to review this, :] school has started so I havent been on as much, hope you understand, if you have any questions of anything I have said in this review, feel free to Owl me at the forums :]

Nice Job

Cait [aka cappie on the forums]

Author's Response: By tense do u mean as in moments or the grammatical way? Well I'll go take a look at it anyways. Yes I know Draco was OOC, but as I have told countless of other people, I have another story that I'm working on and am about to post giving all the details about Draco's change and hopefully no one will be left in confusion. I'm not good at descriptives I'm sad to say. i had to write a descriptive essay in English today and barely passed. This was my first story that I ever wrote so that makes it special. It is also my most popular I'm thinking. I am getting betas for all my stories shortly. =] Thank you for the review. I loved it!!!!!!!!

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