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Review:Dracana says:
I liked this. It was a nice, casual setting, a simple display of emotions that was evenly paced. I like the way you set this is such a normal situation and yet made a good story out of it. Trust is always going to be an issue that Harry finds hard to cope with, after he is lied to by so many people, and the death of Hagrid in this would have made him doubting.

I think your really strong point is characterisation. Harry was mastered perfectly and I really can imagine him feeling something like this. Trust Harry to turn something simply into a big deal, eh? But the way he automatically went to Ginny to solve his problems was really sweet, and displayed the level of trust between them.

Some things to work on - structure. I think that perhaps it would be a good idea to find a beta to help you out with your paragraphs. The spelling was great, I just feel that the paragraphs look spaced out too much, and whilst this makes the story look longer, its also slightly distracting because there are new paragraphs where they should simple be new sentences. And the kiss between Harry and Ginny seemed a little rushed and abrupt, which surprised me a little.

Other than that, it was great, and the story has worked out really well for you.

Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked it. You're one of the first people that has something more positive to say than negative but anything helps me to become a better author so I'm not complaining really. It's kind of hard to find a beta who actually combs through it and tells you ever single thing that's wrong. some of them just read it and say yeah that is mispelled and you need a comma there etc etc... I will try to find a good one though. The kiss is what ultimately changes Harry's mind about a lot of things so I had to put that in there. Once again, thanks for the lovely review =]

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