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Review:rosai_gryffindor says:
i saw this was re written so decided to read it again!! and it is much better than it was before, and i like that the story will be longer! :)

only one thing though, you got hermiones voice absolutely perfect, but could i ask you not to put in so many italic words? it made it hard work to read! some words needed to be in italics, to emphasise the meaning and put some expression in the voice that speaks the story in your head as you read something. but this story had lots of unnecissary italics that sounded strange emphasised! there were some in nearly every paragraph! you did it a lot in your draco story as well, but it fitted then. with this one, it will read better with fewer!!

great writing though, and i hope you dont mind me pointing the italic thing out! you do missing moments so well, and this fits in nicely! i love all your descriptions of hermione and ron and the weasleys, especially the bit about hermione's teeth! lol!

update soon!!!
rose :)

Author's Response:
Thanks for rereviewing and liking it more. I tried really hard this time. Added loads.

Sorry I went mental with the italic's I'll watch out for that in the future. The only way we learn is though people being honest and pointing stuff out.

Thanks for the reread and rereview


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