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Review:brunettesrule says:
Well, if this is pre-DH I didn't notice until I read it just now in the summary.

This is the first of your stories I've read and I immediately noticed the descriptions - they're detailed but not too long so as to disrupt the flow of the writing.

"Even years of practising Occulmency could not protect him from the gaze of Albus Dumbledore."
I really like that even Snape isn't spared from the gaze of Dumbledore.

And I also like the bit on the stairway that symbolises Snape's movement between the two groups, that for all those years he wasn't really defined as either and involved in both.

"Yet betraying the old Headmaster, who had been his mentor for years, wrung his heart in a way he had not felt since She had died."
Is Lily the 'she'? It's a subtle bit I hadn't noticed until I read it a second time.

Thank you, I really enjoyed it :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reviewing! I'm relieve that this story fits in with canon - it's been so long since I looked at it last. Lily was the "she" yes, though I made it subtle enough that it could be any woman he'd loved. It's wonderful that you enjoyed this story and all the little things in it. Thank you! ^_^

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