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Review:Zacharias_Smith says:
I had mixed feelings about this..more positive than negative though. I do think it could improved but the premise of the story is good and there was a lot of great stuff in it. Your characterization of Ginny was good, in her grief and eventual acceptance, but I thought Draco was just a little off. There wasn't really enough to him. He just felt like he could have been any guy, really. Not arrogant or snidey enough. I know that wouldn't have been appropriate to the situation, but if you weren't going to put any of that into their exchange then it would have been good to at least get some history on their relationship. I felt a bit unconvinced by their sudden friendship and I think it might have been more poignant or interesting if there was a bit more about how Ginny felt about Draco. Without that, it could really have been anybody who spoke to her then.
There were quite a few grammar/punctuation mistakes, eg:

“James,” Lily scolded, “Is that all you think about

And that’s all that mattered. (this was a particular shame as it was the last sentence. It should be 'that was all that mattered'.)

I did like the idea of the imaginary scene and I liked the fact Ginny had to move on from her grief. I did think that overall the style was a little bit choppy. Some parts, particularly towards the end, flowed really well, but it took a while to sort of..get into the flow of the style.

Anyway this was good and with a bit of editing definitely has the potential to be great.

Author's Response: Wow. thank you for leaving me such a lovely review. I'm writing a novel now telling all about Draco's change and everything. I know it's a little hard to comprehend why Draco seemed like a friend to Ginny in this with no insults thrown, but bear with me I hope to answer eveyone's questions about him in my novel. i have the first four chapters written. A person can change a lot in 15 years as i've said before, even Draco can. I agree my spelling isn't the best. Sometimes I type to fast and I'll miss stuff and my punctuation isn't great. I'm working on that now amd I guess I shall get a beta as soon as I can. I will definately take your advice on the ending sentance. I was a little bit iffy about that too but I couldn't think of nothing else at the moment so I was stuck with that. So I am glad you enjoyed and reviewed. I will take your advice and get a beta. =]

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