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Review:Raina says:
Okay, so I have a very dorky obsession of watching this sci fi/drama TV show, and in there, a guy who's been in a test tube pod for his whole 16 years of life finally breaks out and enters the human world. Seidon reminds me of him so much with his completely lovable naivety and way of taking words at face value. I really started laughing when he handed Wendy a decayed hand. To him, it's the most natural thing in the world, and haha, he even claims that there are more of them! And I love how the human and the kelpie both view the other as somewhat inferior. Seidon thinks the girl is weak, and the girl thought Seidon was slightly not right in the head. But you gotta give Wendy credit for not bolting on the spot; I would have high-tailed it out of there. Though I suppose, Seidon looks really innocent, harmless and sweet, doesn't he?

That was such a beautifully chosen encounter; he was so proud of having scared a human too. Such simple yet delightful emotions! And Elisabeth wonders if all boys are so difficult, haha, does she have a lot to learn. I'd take Seidon over one of them anytime. You really do make him lovable you know, the way he sulks when his scary tricks don't work, and how he's surprised when Elisabeth "reads his mind". And haha, the chimpanzee joke. Gosh, it turned grim and bloody fast, didn't it? I suppose Acheron was the one who killed the two boys? *shudders* Poor Seidon, having to stay away from Elisabeth. Would he have found her to be predictable after a while? Or would they have actually become close friends?

I got so into the story that I almost forgot what you asked me to review about. The story isn't going fast at all! The pacing is great, and nothing feels rushed. You put in just the right amount of detail, and the alternating between first and third person is a wonderful contrast. It feels like he's reminiscing about everything. Another slight typo. Towards the end, in the first sentence of the italic portion, it should be "wizards dressed as werewolves" not "wizards dress". That's all :)

Author's Response: I've never heard of that show but definitely sounds interesting. Great to read how much you liked Seidon, silly kelpie that he is ---

Thanks for saying so ... I had some doubts on the shift from light hearted encounters to violent death - especially on this chapter. Great to know that you think it still flows well and wasn't too abrupt.

Thanks for that correction. I'll fix it right away.

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