I'm kind of moved by this. In a strange way I really did like this. It's not your favorite, and you have improved, but for some reason, I find it sweet, sad and just right for the mood I'm in at the moment. Here's my favorite part (sorry about the long quote): He loved her. He had meant to tell her that. He had meant to marry her. He had meant for her to be the mother of his children. He had meant to grow old with her. He had meant to kiss her, hug her, hold her, and make love to her. He had meant to dance with her, cook with her, buy a house together, and teach their children magic together. This actually made me all teary eyed. ^_^ It just touched me.
Oh, here's one error: Harry watched as Ron wept and wept, and Harry’s own eyes streamed its own silent tears. Should be "streamed their" because eyes is a plural. And maybe you could leave the second "own" off. ^_^ Otherwise, there weren't any mistake that I could find. Although, I think that Voldemort was a bit funny with his dialogue. And I don't think you meant that. ^_^
Anyway, I think it's a sweet little story. I'm just starting to see a horrible resemblance between your stories... someone always dies. Don't kill Harry or Draco in Harry Woke Up, please. ^_^ *huggles* Thank you for writing these stories.
Author's Response: My dear Rebekka! *dances* Hehe. Ah, you chose to read this one, eh? Yes, it's my least favorite thing I've written, probably this and The Bet. And I'm iffy on Complicated. I have a love/hate relationship with that story, lol. Anywho!
I'm glad you liked it and that it was the right mood for you. It's just a sappy lil story, really. Probably the part you quoted was my favorite part too, where Ron mentions all the things he wanted to do with her. I might have teared up a bit, writing it. Hehe. But I'm glad it touched you. It as certainly meant to be touching...
Ah, thanks for catching my error, you're completely right. I didn't get a beta for this, so my eyes probably just skipped over that issue. I'll try and remember to fix it!
Voldemort was funny? LoL. He was meant to be partially sarcastic/cruelly humourous, and mostly just a bit cruel. It was my first time to write him, so I'd take any advice I could get on that! Hehe.
Ah, you're seeing a horrible resemblance between my stories, eh? *betrays no expression as she looks at you* Interesting. *sniggers* I make no promises... other than to finish any story that I start posting.
Thanks so much for reviewing!!!