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Review:goddessofsnark says:
I like this, I really do. I think you have the concept of the completely self-absorbed "I'm hot and I know it" teenager down perfectly and it's hilarious. You fully realize how completely full of herself and perfect the character is, and use that to your complete advantage. In the hands of a weaker author, it'd come across as a complete mary-sue, but you manage to pull it off and convey the concept of the satire very very well.

I think the best line so far is "Lily, focus, we're talking about me!" and it just is hilariously awesome. Please do continue, I'm liking this idea so far.

My only complaint would to be to offset thoughts a bit-italicize them or something, like the "oh this so works" line when she's looking at herself in the mirror, etc.

But this is bloody hilarious, and I can't wait to see more.

Author's Response: Wow ... I think my face would rip if my smile got any larger. Thank you so much! I was really worried that I hadn't pulled off the satire well. The last thing on earth I wanted was another Mary Sue. Thank you for pointing out the lack of italics, I'll deffinetly look into that. I'm going to go back through and do a quick edit for grammer and italics and such. Thank you for the awesome review, and as soon as I get a new chapter up I will deffinetly let you know! :)

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