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Review:DandN says:
Another great one-shot from you ^^ Albite not as original as your Charlie/Luna one, I still enjoyed reading this :)

I liked your description in this on a lot, it seemed effortless and flowed onwards naturally. Also the charactarisation was very good in my opinion, though at times Hermione didn't quite feel like the girl we know from the books. In my opinion though, Hermione romance fics are among the hardest once there is so I think you did a great job given the challengingness of the genre ^^

I enjoyed the way the memories and action alternated, pure action gets boring to read after a while--at least for me :P. The 'false memory' was a great idea, I thought it gave much more depth to the story all in all. Oh and special comment on the Harry's 'philosophical moment' in there, I think you did wonderful job with it! Often times when people try to be philosophical it comes acorss as artificial and fake, but not in your writing! Much kudos to you on that ^^

I think the shot could have ended without the last bit (starting with " Ron had indeed been okay with it." and ending "From her eyes, she had made the right one."). I'm just personally not fond of any explanatory bits in the end, where the futures of all the characters is told. It feels bit redundant and doesn't give much to the story ^^

Harry's a brunette? It's hard to find a good word to describe black haired person, but brunette is bit misleading in my opinon :)

All in all this was enjoyable one-shot with several AU features without going too overboard with it, well done!

Author's Response: Wow, another lovely review, friend!

By the way, are you D? Are D and N both female? Just curious. (o:

I'm so happy to hear you loved my descriptions and characterisation. I feel like my descriptions go by the wayside a lot.

Erm, indeed you're right, it's hard to get Hermione-romance accurate. You have to develop that part of her because we never really see it. I try to make it like her, though I realise I was probably off a bit. (o:

Hehe, you liked Harry's 'philosophical' moment? I know I hate reading them in fanfic because they usually don't feel right. Harry doesn't often go off sharing all his thoughts and feelings so it's tricky to write, yet it needed to be in there. I'm so pleased that it didn't seem fake! (o:

Actually, truthfully, I don't like the 'wrapping up the end' in the pretty little package, but at the same time I wanted to include in the story a peacefulness about Ron, because I don't favor the idea of the Trio splitting up, and if Hermione had had to consider that in her choice, then I think she might choose differently, perhaps. I dunno. But thanks for being honest about that part!

Brunette - ah I figure brown and dark hair is all brunette, even black. There's not a proper name, is there? LoL!

Thanks heaps friend, I thoroughly enjoyed your review!


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