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Review:ChizzaLazty says:
Ooh, what a lovely story! Excuse me for the not so long review I'm going to write, but I'll try to come up with something to say :)

Okay, I'll not start at the top today, because I have to get this off my chest before I forget it: I liked that you didn't write that they actually kissed. I mean, I'm pretty sure they did (right?), but you didn't use the word "kiss", you didn't write much about it. I think that was even more sweet than it would have been if you'd described it in detail...

Okay, from the top now. I'm still a bit confused about the first part. I don't think I know all of the words, and even if I had, I don't think I'd understand it. But that's my fault, not yours :p But, you know, I understood what was going on when Oliver came into the picture.

There was one line I didn't get, but where I think I might have noticed a spelling/grammar error: "so as if to ask him down with out directly doing so." As far as I know, it's supposed to be "without". Unless "With out" has another meaning, in which case I just humiliated myself :)

And what's the KBOW-challenge? I know what a challenge is, I just don't know which one this is:p ...and I'm curious. I'm always curious :p

Your characterization of Oliver was very sweet. He seemed so cool! And I don't mean cool as in popular, but cool as in funny and smart and handsome. You know... dreamy :p Well, Oliver can do whatever he wants and still be dreamy... (almost).

I really had no idea who the girl was until the end. I mean, I knew it wasn't Angelina Johnson, because of the picture, but Katie Bell or that last one whose name I can't remember at the moment? I had no idea. The suspense was killing me, but I managed to keep myself from scrolling down to check.

True, it was a little short, but not... well, not for the plot. It fit well with the plot, it made sense to end it there, and I don't think you needed to explain more, include more detail or whatever; it's fine the way it is. And I'm talking about the length here, but really, the entire fic is fine the way it is. You know, not fine as in okay, obviously, but fine as in so-good-I'm-asking-you-not-to-do-anything-to-it-because-it-might-ruin-it fine :) Except for, you know, the spelling mistake I wrote about earlier. Unless it's supposed to be that way.

Okay, I'll stop rambling now.

Looking back I see that perhaps it's not such a short review after all (I'm using reversed psychology on myself. It works :p He he). Good luck with your other stories, I hope you update, for example, Proposals, soon :) It's one of my favourite stories :p

Christina

Author's Response: Oh, wow. That reverse psychology is nice. ;)

They did kiss. Actually, the way I wrote that was inspired by the very end of a chapter in F. Scott Fitzgerald's The Great Gatsby. Huh. :)

Hm. In the beginning, it was just saying that she's sitting in the snow, really. She was admiring the landscape, if you will. And you're correct about that mistake, I'll be off to fix it momentarily.

KBOW - Katie Bell/Oliver Wood, it was a challenge in the forums from LostMaeblleshire. ;)

I'm glad you enjoyed it, though! Especially Oliver, because I thought he might be off a bit. Hopefully Draco will at long last cooperate with me, so I can move on to someone else (perhaps Oliver). Thanks for the lovely review! :)


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