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Review:chd1026 says:
Oh wow! That was incredibly intense.
Something before I begin the review: Using the abbriated, "PM" is informal, and therefore retracts from you story. I suggest using Minister or Prime Minister instead.
Okay! So I loved this line, "For good measure, fires had broken out in many parts of London..." Very funny! It accurately discribes the cynical, sarcastic mood the Minister is experiencing, and you easily depict the civil unrest that has occured over Britain. Also this, "External intervention. Next they’ll ask to call Jesus down from heaven. Divine intervention." Once again, really amusing...you've characterized the Prime Minister very well. Great work!
I do think that this is very interesting, but I'm still unsure as to what the main focus of the story will be. We don't know the main characters yet, either. But it IS more of a prologue, yes? Well it does set the scene very well, but if I didn't have chapter two waiting for me I might have been at a loss for the goal of the story. You see what I mean?
It's too bad that Myers had to die! He seemed very interesting, but I do like that he figured out the dementors without even really understanding them.
Overall, I really liked this!
After finals are through, I'll come back to this and read the rest =]
XXX


Author's Response: Hi CHD!

Yeah, a lot of people have told me about "PM". I was aware of it while writing the story, but I thought that using "Prime Minister" every time would feel too long-drawn out and formal and look like stilted language.

Yeah, I've tried to give him a cynical, sarcastic outlook on events.

Well, the main focus of the story is of course the horcrux hunt. This is just a prologue, as you said. The main characters are pretty much the same, as you'll find in canon. Not too many additions.

Myers, well, he had to die. It would be very unrealistic to expect him to get away from the likes of Bella. Some of the lesser Death Eaters, maybe, but Bella is in a totally different league.

Thanks for your review Chd! Please do come back when you get time :)

Chiron


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