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Review:Chloe Kay says:
Oh my sad!

A depressing Fred and George fic? Do those exist? Well...I guess they do now. Wow.

You get serious original story idea points - I've never read anything like this. The first paragraph was amazing, an incredible hook. And I love that you captured so many aspects of Molly's personality - the ridiculous memories of Fred and Georege's childhood, being so angry and vengeful while just wanting everything to go back to normal.

Tears actually came to my eyes when she was talking to the grandkids - oh my gosh, so much can be said through the simple emotions of children, its unreal.

The only critisism I have is that it seemed a bit choppy. You might want to work on your transistions between events and thoughts a bit, just to make the flow of the story seem more natural. But don't change too much as far as the sentence structure goes, the choppy sentences keep a simplicity that allows for the emotion behind the story show.

That, and the spacing is a little excessive.

Fabulous work, really different.

Author's Response: Yea... the spacings wouldn't change! I tried editing them but it just didn't work =(. Thank you for the amazing review! It is always nice to know that people enjoy your fic... It is rather different isn't it. One of the reasons I wrote it actually. Thanks for the review!! =) x x

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