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Review:AndrinaBlack says:
Sirius/Lily was really what I came to look for at first from your stories, and I was not disappointed! :) I thought that it would be more interesting than James/Lily, and it seems that it is. The only thing I'm wondering about in this fic is how the situation with James is, as it seems like it is that far in time when they would be together/married, but that really has nothing to do with this fic come to think of it.

You say that Remus is hard to write (I read your response to my review, thanks for that), but I think Lily is really hard. So I'm very happy to find someone who can write her without it being one big cliche. I think she still sounds like Lily though she is a bit different from how she is usually described. And not to mention Sirius; he is just right!

I have to say that I really love your descriptions. You don't forget about any of the sences. I read your writing exercise on the forums, and you seem to write as you teach.

Then to the best part! It was so beautiful in the ending when you described the whole breathing thing. I loved it how the breath symbolised so much for Lily and how Sirius helped her to get over the hardest part!


Author's Response: Thanks so much for the great reviews you've left. They are amazing helpful and insightful. I appreciate that so much! I have always written Lily a bit different than everyone else (people seem to portray as Hermione-like) and, honestly, I've taken a lot of heat for that over the years. It's nice to hear that someone likes her! Odd that you should mention about James...this chapter is actually a two-parter with another author,Noblevyne. She is a die-hard James/Lily shipper but because she's such a great friend agreed to do a combination of Sirius/Lily and James. When she will get her half posted I can only guess but the intention is that just after the end of mine story, James appears from fighting the battle to take a rest in the medical tent. No telling where she'll take the idea from there :D Again, thanks for the wonderful review! I tend to be late in responding but I do eventually respond, I promise!

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