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Review:xobebeox says:
Okay, this is gorgeous, and you know I think that because I've told you. But honestly, it's stunning.

It's really different than what we normally see from you, because usually you write with more passion in the atmosphere and more of a rush. But I think that the melancholy and lethargy that hung in the air was absolutely perfect for this story and situation, and I think you pulled it off beautifully.

As usual, your descriptions are on-spot. I think one of the things you do amazingly is not neglecting the other senses; often we use sight as the only means to convey the situation but you used every sense in order to put the reader in that medical tent with them. I could almost feel the exhaustion and the atmosphere just pouring through the computer screen.

The contrast between Lily and Sirius was really well done earlier in the chapter where they were talking about this being his escape, versus her being able to leave. Your dialogue fits perfectly. This is just an example of how you've really milked a mundane event for all it's worth.

Really, though. I absolutely loved reading this story. You have built up the tension so well and it was just this perfect wave of building up and release. I know I’ve told you this, but the combination of description, dialogue, and just the pervasive attitude that seems to seep through into your writing and out of the computer just makes for a perfect atmosphere and tone. You should really be proud of this. It’s very different, but it’s still outstanding.


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