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Review:Gandelf The White says:
Hmm...This chapter was ok. You have some brilliant ideas and showed your talent for description once more with those excellent fight scenes.
My one critisism however, was Voldemort and his mannerisms. There's something about your characterisation of him throughout this story that just doesn't fit. His use of vocabulary seems perfect but i think the problem is that he seems a little too...well..."human" for my liking. Perhaps you could argue that this is because we have never seen that side of him but he just seems to exhibit far too many emotions. For example at one point in this chapter you described him as clasping his hands together like an excited little girl...that just seemed very uncharacteristic of Voldemort. He doesn't come across as someone who would openly display happiness like that. Not in the presence of so many death eaters anyway. I was also quite curious about his reaction to Draco marrying Ginny. I highly doubt that he would sanction such a wedding, however i'll reserve judgement on that as it may be part of your overall plot. Don't get me wrong however, i very much enjoyed the chapter. The story seems to be entering its final stages now and i'm highly anticipating a climactic ending. 8/10

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