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Review:loony86 says:
Ah yes, dear Albus, I agree - Phoenixes are amazing creatures. ;)

I like the idea of the old divination teacher seeing himself retire and therefore deciding to retire. It's a nice new variation of a self-fulfilling prophecy.

Your first ever fanfic, eh? You knew I couldn't possibly resist that. And I really love the beginning! One thing though; in the first few paragraphs, you've got just a few too many clichés about Albus and Fawkes. The strange golden watch, the sparkling eyes behind half moon spectacles... all of that is true. Maybe I've just read it once too much. It doesn't disturb the flow though, and really, I've seen worse things. ;)

The last sentence makes me wonder... do we actually know of a case where Aberforth had refused any real and important directives from his brother? Hm... I hardly know this character, and you may well just have set a bunnie free.

Now I'm curious what this flashback meant, the one where Albus thinks he should have done something before Tom came to Hogwarts...

Another note on the issue of "first ever fanfic"; first thing, it's not obvious at all that it was your first one. And second... I always like first stories because they're usually quite original, and they show what an author really wants to write. Especially in your case, I have the feeling that you wrote this before you were "spoilt" by reading too much fanfic and by discussing it too deeply *coughIBlameSAYScough*. You have certainly developed since then, but I'm glad I have the chance to get a glimpse of the writer you once were when you started. Our first steps in the world of HPFF were so similar... Yeah, that sounds really cheesy, and I'll just stop not and read on. ;)

Author's Response: I must admit I used the clichés on purpose. They are part of Albus characterization - we don't know much about him, after all. lol. (I know I'm weird, lol.) About the old divination teacher... I told to myself that when you can see the future, you believe what you see, thus you have to make sure what you saw will become true. LOL.

Sorry for the bunny. Aberforth is a mysterious character... We know he's the bartender of the Hogs Head, that something happened with a goat and that he and Dung had some dealings in HBP...

I agree with you concerning your first story being your most original. In an attempt to find back that originality, I'm writing an OC/OC fic! You're right, I wrote this fic before I was "spoilt" by reading too many fanfics. lol. Maybe I said this in the A/N, but this fic is based on my theory on the night of the prophecy. Then I found out I like filling in the blanks left by JKR.

You're right, our first steps in the world of HPFF were similar. *hugs*

Anne



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