That was beautiful! Truly, i think i am going to cry...
Your imagery is astounding Dracana - you are seriously talented! I'm not sure thats allowed...
This whole piece seems like a metaphor for the futility of war. Hermione's pain is real but almost detached, as in shock and numbed grief. Your imagery is simply incredible - I was there, on that tarnished earth with her, walking among the dead, seeing what she saw.
I love the lack of dialogue - after all, who is left to talk to?
I also really loved Draco's death scene. It was beautiful, and I liked the way you made it seem natural and peaceful. I don't know what it is about this piece, but it is the most emotionally stirring one i have read so far.
I think my fav line is ,"He would be just another body to feed to the earth at sunset."
That really resonates with me because I am a pagan. I'm not sure what you know of our worldview, but that sums up death so clearly and beautifully. It really cements that life and death are part of a great cycle, one that is never ending, and one that comes to us all. okay, i'll stop being religious now :)
Simply beautiful - the word 'beautiful' cannot begin to express what i feel about this piece. I am touched, spiritually. I'm not trying to sound obsequious there, its the truth, and this is going straight to my favs. I need to read it again.
Author's Response: Wow, MajiKat, what a review!!
Not allowed? *picks out talent and shares it out* Lol, as if you'd need a piece!! Your works are amazing!! *cries over your Blaise/Draco story*
Oh, then I achieved what I wanted if you could feel yourself there. When I write, I see everything before me, and therefore try to encapture it within my words. I love to put forward an image and let my readers live my story, if that makes any sense.
Oh, I despise it when people over-do-it on dialogue. This piece was yet another of my one-shots that didn't need the effort of talking - besides, I'm trying to make my readers be Hermione as she walks through the field, and too much dialogue would spoil that effect.
Really? Yey!! It was full of emotions, I suppose, but in a calming sense that was mroe of a reality. This is how I'd imagine the after-math of war to be, when the ones you love are dead and you are walking that painted picture, slowly realising the horrors that have past and become, yet knowing there is nothing you can do about it but accept, and moving on. Of course, the grief will come later - this is more of a numbness than anything else.
You're a pagan? Wow!! I don't really know much about that - it would be wonderful to listen to some more about it from you sometime. I know that pagan is associated most strongly with nature, right? It sounds like a beautiful religion. If anti-religious though, I'm afraid, but I'll willingly listen at any time. Most religion is used as a control methord, but pagan differentiates from that. It is something more beautiful and does not rise to seize power of a person, I think. Like I said, you'll have to tell me more about it. *_*
Oh, thank you so much for such a positive response!! I myself certainly enjoyed reading over this fic once again, because of its sense of peace that seperates it from anything else I've written so far. There are many types of raw emotion, and this is just one of them. I'm sure I have a lot yet to discover and write about.
Thanks loads and loads, you cannot imagine how much this review means to me. :-)