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Review:GinnyRox says:
This was a good start for a story. But it could use some more detail. Try describing what the ministry ballroom looked like. Were there lots of decorations hung all over the place? Was it a big vast room? By describing these things it makes the readers invision the characters more lucidly.

Also the characters. How did Harry and Hermione get together in the first place? How did Ginny die? Try to describe these things so that readers can understand how the characters got to where they are now.

I'm looking forward to seeing what you are going to do with this story, since this first chapter was so short! Hopefully the next chapter will be longer!

Author's Response: I know what you mean exactly. I usually follow these things when I write but I was sort of doing an exercise. You see, when I was writing this chapter, I was reading Hemingway's "The Sun Also Rises" (great book!!). Hemingway uses something called the Iceberg Principle where he only reveals so much and the rest is left sort of ipso facto. Of course, I am not Ernest Hemingway so I can understand the confusion!

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