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Review:JamesandLily4ever says:
Okay, I'm going to go backwards...

1. There was more than 1 Death Eater.
2. I like the thing about Ginny rescueing Harry, but how did Ginny get there? Wouldn't she be with her family back at home?
3. Your Avada Kedavra was misspelled. (If you're using word, spell check or go to a HP info site -- I suggest Hp-lexicon -- to check for the correct spelling of spells.)
4. I think that you should put the letter in italics, so it'll be less confusing to the rest of the writing. (It helps readers that are lost up in that huge paragraph)
5. Try to loosen un on the paragraphs. They are HUGE! (I think that mine are too, but it varies on the important parts.) There's nothing wrong with that, but there has to be clarity.
6. Double Spacing is needed! -- There has to be clarity!!

I liked this chapter though. It's an okay opening to the fic. :) I'm going to read on. :D

~Meli
P/s: My rating so far (since you've caught some of my interest...) 9/10. Your idea is a very good one to start with. Keep on the great work! (I hope that you update this soon, because I'm a fast reader!)
P/s/s: "Finding out about a doubt" is coming up next week. ;) Be on the lookout for it!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks, I'm glad that it caught your interest. I have to admit that I don't usually take constructive critisism *or however you spell it* very well, but I know that you're right. I also have to admit that, in my defense I was in a hurry to post it :) I usually reread and triple check anything that I write, and for some reason the first chapter of this story, and the other story I didn't. I know that I misspelled the Avada Kedavra *blushes* However, I'm happy for my rating!!

I'm currently writing the fourth chapter to this story, and the third chapter to Anything goes


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