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Review:slytheringinny [nsi] says:
I didn't really get this one...I did get it and was on track until he turned back the time turner. Harry wouldn't have been born in 1972, nevertheless five years old. I liked the pain he showed, despite the plot moving a tad bit fast-paced for me.

Once more I caught a few things grammar wise and spelling wise, but nothing a good beta can fix. I read your response you left and it's not a problem to have a beta, trust me. They're extremely helpful and if you want me to review over the entire thing as a beta to edit some things up, just drop a PM. =)

This is quite a hard piece to pull off, and I think you made a very good attempt at it. Kudos to you on that and great job. At the beginning I could really feel Harry's pain and what he was wallowing in. Maybe you could enhance this more with a bit of flashbacks...leading back to memories of the letters, dreams of the Weasley's dying and him just being a watcher outside the dream... *shrugs* Just my opinion.

Other than that, I think it was a very good piece. =)

-Ginni-

Author's Response: Thanks....thats always a good thing to say first off.
I know Harry wasn't alive in 1972, I was trying to guess the age that Voldmort, or Tom riddle back then would be.

Kind of confusing I know, Its hard because I haven't got a great grasp on how old people are and etc.

I'd have to think on the flashbacks...I'm not sure, I hadn't actually thought about them. I will definitely be editing all of my previous stories, like christmas wish was edited after you posted.

Thanks for the offer of a beta, I'm going to try and edit out all the quirks before I contemplate that. At least when I edit quirks out things I couldn't or didn't write before will pop up.


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