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Review:almost_witch says:
Ohhh... this was very, very sweet, heartbreaking and any other words that would possibly fit into this.

I loved how bitter Snape was, but at the same time he was sweet, and almost, almost (underline that), charming.

One thing I do want to say before I go on to praise this is that maybe describe and go into more details of when they leave the picnic. What were the surroundings like, did people notice, was he worried about how she would react, ect, ect. The only thing you need to improve on this is that you need to make the reader (me) more in the place that they are, like... give me the words so I have eyes.

Make sense?

Anyway, I do love the plot (again) and I was really glad to read this, I do love heartbreaking stories, and this was truly heartbreaking.

I like how you decribed them making love, normally people would go through details and describe it as an event of passion, but you really showed that it doesn't has to be, and that it was something that two poor lovers did for their last time together. It was different and great at the same time.

Well done, and I'm out,

Almost xx

Author's Response: Huggles Almost and welcome back to my page. (Their is a second story to this and I am hoping to entice you back to read it. It's even more heartbreaking-- really.) I was going for the emotions of the final goodbye, both off to fill the expected obligations that others want of them. I could have probably labeled it as a missing moment from Mourning's Wake also. (small giggle). I guess getting mixed into the emotions I lost sight of the surroundings. Eh..
Anyhow love reading your comments and I offer you a big squishy hug for the review. ~~juls

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