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Review:dracoslover1 says:
Very good start that you have here. At the beginning of your story, you went into some nice descripitions of feelings, so on and so forth. There seemed to be some repetition as you went along in the beginning...maybe possibly you want to change the wording to make it seem less repetive.

Towards the end of the story, it kind of a wee bit down hill in my mind. Not a ton, mind you, but just a wee bit. I think that from going from straight descripitive to only a little bit of descripitive kind of lost it's edge for me. Maybe you can go more into Draco's feelings when he hits the tree. You can also do a flashback on the day that Ginny died and his feelings on that day, and also on that day that he had to lay her to rest.

Other then that, it was very good. I love the suspense that you gave to the story.

Author's Response: I understand what you mean, I thought about doing the flash back you mentioned- but I was trying to keep this story short. I have a habbit of making really long one shots. Thank you for your advice

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