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Review:MargaretLane says:
The part about Ron being in a punch up with Draco Malfoy really amused me.

In "there might not be any more seats," "any" and "more" should be two separate words.

I really liked Cindy's comment about being thrown to the werewolves. Not only does it fit with JK Rowling's habit of inventing wizarding equivilants (sorry, I don't know if that is spelled correctly) for many of our phrases, but it also sounds like something Draco would say. We all know how prejudiced he is, and it sounds likely that he would use werewolves as a sort of boogyman to threaten his kids with.

One thing that strikes me as difficult to believe is how quickly people trust Cindy. It strikes me as a little unlikely that an eleven year old girl would go on like that about how she is different to her family and how people believe that evil lies in her blood. At her age, it is more likely that she would doubt herself and wonder if maybe her parents were right and she was wrong. I really doubt she would openly call her parents evil. And even if she did, I find it hard to believe that everybody would believe her immediately. The part where Rose tells Ella not to tell anybody except Cindy seems very implausible to me. Surely, the daughter of somebody like Draco is the last person she would want Ella to tell. How do they know Cindy is telling the truth for one thing? And even assuming she is, it's asking a lot of an eleven year old to expect them to keep secrets like that from their parents. She may mean to keep it a secret, but what if she left something slip?

That said, I really like the idea of Ella having a Malfoy for a best friend. It really goes against the cliches. I just think it would make more sense if their friendship didn't develop until after Cindy was placed in Gryffindor or Ravenclaw or somewhere and Ella gradually began to realise that she could be trusted.

Cho and Draco-that's not a partnership I would ever have imagined. This story really does sound interesting and orginal.

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