Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:MargaretLane says:
Oh, now I remember the other thing I wanted to say about the previous chapter: you described Ella as their "oldest and only daughter." Did you mean that she has younger brothers? Even then, it would be better to say "their oldest child and only daughter". If she is actually their only child, then it would be better to leave out the thing about her being the oldest.

Hmm, I'm not sure that Ron and Hermione are very wise to buy a broom of that standard for an eleven year old child. Might have something to do with my having grown up in Ireland in the 80s and 90s when the country was relatively poor, but the idea of buying a girl of that age a broom that is probably meant for professional Quidditch players does not strike me as a good idea, for a number of reasons. Better, in my opinion, to buy her a cheap one that she can mess around on that that it won't matter too much if she damages.

Hmm, the plot gets thicker here. Bellatrix Lestrange wants Ella. I wonder why. And the Death Eaters killed Neville and appeared to disappear then. This gets curiouser and curiouser. You have the beginnings of a really intriguing plot here. I was evidently wrong about Harry being dead though.

I really like the way you have the kids of so many of her parents' friends in different years to her. It always strikes me as a little unbelieveable when all the characters we know have kids of the same age.

Oh, "underestimate" is all one word.

The part about Neville being killed and Luna's reaction was so sad. You portrayed the emotion of it really well. I usually prefer the idea of Luna being unmarried and without children, but I can see the logic behind the Luna/Neville pairing and it does make sense.

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Submit Report:  





All stories remain the property of their authors and must not be copied in any form without their consent. This is an unofficial, not for profit site, and is in no way connected with J.K. Rowling, Scholastic Books or Bloomsbury Publishing or Warner Bros. It is not endorsed by any of the aforementioned parties. Rights to characters and their images is neither claimed nor implied. The use of photographs and/or the likeness of any person contained herein does not imply endorsement of any kind. Any depictions were obtained through publically available sources and therefore fall under fair use. Although we may provide links to other websites, we are not responsible for any material at these sites. You acknowledge that you link to these other websites at your own risk. All original administrative content is copyright of the site owner and must not be copied in any form (electronic or otherwise) without the prior consent of the siteowner. ©2000-2012 Fanfictionworld.net

[terms of service] [report abuse] [privacy policy] [site credits]
 
 

navigation

home

search HPFF
read stories
write stories
login/register
get help
site links
forums
podcasts
Terms of Service
Site Rules
contact us

  
 
 

categories & genres

Genre:
- crossover
- drama
- fluff
- general
- horror/dark
- humor
- mystery
- romance
- action/adventure
- angst
- au
- young adult

Popular Pairings:
- harry/ginny
- ron/hermione
- james/lily
- draco/hermione
- more...

Format:
- one-shot
- short story
- novella
- novel
- short story collection
- songfic

  
 
 

quick links

my account
ToS
random story
site rules
help
merchandise


  
 
 

fanfictionworld.net