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Review:MargaretLane says:
Oh, now I remember the other thing I wanted to say about the previous chapter: you described Ella as their "oldest and only daughter." Did you mean that she has younger brothers? Even then, it would be better to say "their oldest child and only daughter". If she is actually their only child, then it would be better to leave out the thing about her being the oldest.

Hmm, I'm not sure that Ron and Hermione are very wise to buy a broom of that standard for an eleven year old child. Might have something to do with my having grown up in Ireland in the 80s and 90s when the country was relatively poor, but the idea of buying a girl of that age a broom that is probably meant for professional Quidditch players does not strike me as a good idea, for a number of reasons. Better, in my opinion, to buy her a cheap one that she can mess around on that that it won't matter too much if she damages.

Hmm, the plot gets thicker here. Bellatrix Lestrange wants Ella. I wonder why. And the Death Eaters killed Neville and appeared to disappear then. This gets curiouser and curiouser. You have the beginnings of a really intriguing plot here. I was evidently wrong about Harry being dead though.

I really like the way you have the kids of so many of her parents' friends in different years to her. It always strikes me as a little unbelieveable when all the characters we know have kids of the same age.

Oh, "underestimate" is all one word.

The part about Neville being killed and Luna's reaction was so sad. You portrayed the emotion of it really well. I usually prefer the idea of Luna being unmarried and without children, but I can see the logic behind the Luna/Neville pairing and it does make sense.

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