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Review:Dragonette says:
who's her mother?!?!?!??! (note on prev. chptrs - you could break it up into two sections, not two different chapters)
I WANNA KNOW!! :) Great job - still some spelling. Maybe dwell a bit more on how stupid Pansy is, and how Draco conveys his emotions through his actions. DIALOGUE!!

Remember, show don't tell. If you can give an example of how Pansy is a ditz rather than say it outright, it'll be better. And expand on Nazo a bit - how does she feel?

Great job, again. love the chapter title. 8/10.

Author's Response: her mother.... I have someone in mind but I might change it soo yeah.........Working on spelling but I bet it was better then the other chapppters right hopefully. this chappter wasn't suposed to have dialoge and trust me the next chapter is so much better with evevn better lines and more emotion and and I will show how Pansy is ditz! ya thanxs for the suggestions wahooooooo
nazozink
Ps for reading and reviewing heres a never ending cookie
(explination of what that is in the next chapie:)


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