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Review:Lucid says:
It has taken me an age to get here and review, so I apologise for my extreme lateness. I didn't realise it was a HG/SS straight away, but I was very pleased to see it was. Its the first ship I loved, and a secret of mine, as a lot of people don't support it and it can get squicky, but you have found a way for them to be together in a totally believable way which has been handled in such a mature way. I love this and have it added to my favourites, thats how much I liked it. I particularily liked your descriptions of the battle at the begining, you had some very dark things to say and bring the reader to observe, and throughout it you managed to make Hermione seem dazed and almost running from outside herself, I loved how that came across. This line in particular really stuck out to me - "The fires burnt lower, there being not much else to feed their hunger than the infernal mud that was everywhere." - The language and phrasing brought 'hell' to mind vividly. I love how after she wakes up, you don't reveal how everyone has reacted to her in the last few years. The fact she left, Harry died and she wasn't there seems wrong but you allow the reader to know that she wasn't really a coward, its something she has inflicted on herself. I honestly would have liked more at the end, but then that could just be me being greedy, and I know it was already quite long. I think I would have liked to have seen what happened next, but that does not take away from the end at all, because I enjoyed Hermione's curiousity. Your characterisation of Hermione was very good, but I think your characterisation of Snape was excellent, and you seemed to do it in a single sentence - The Hermione Granger that once was died there. You are nothing compared to her. - I thought it was a rather brilliant line, that shone out from the screen. I'm also happy to see that you are considering writing the ship again, please do! I'd love to see what else you can do with them.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so incredibly much for reviewing this, Lucid. Don't worry at all about the time it took, I know that you were extremely busy with other things. It's a huge compliment you've paid to me with this review. This ship is really interesting to write about (excluding the icky stuff that people tend to get from it) with the dynamic between Snape and Hermione. The beginning part of this turned out very different from what I planned, yet it's perhaps one of my best setting descriptions - this battle scene is definitely very hellish. This was my first time writing Hermione, so I'm glad that she turned out well. The ending was very difficult to write. First it was too fluffy, and even now it's rather too fluffy, but not as bad as it had been. I would have liked to have made it longer, but for the length that the story was becoming. When I do write more of the ship, I'd really like to add on to the ending of this piece, just to show a bit of the aftermath. Thanks very much for reviewing this! =D

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