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Review:lowered_expectations says:
...and it worked :) excellent. your review, part two.

Lastly, I also noticed your authors note and your concerns that she’s too much like Luna. To be frank, and a little critical of JKR, Luna is a bit of a fantastical character – not a supremely real person in all cases and I suggested earlier some things that might help to make Moth seem more real – mainly in removing some of her more detached reactions. I think giving her more human reactions will help to differentiate her from Luna. I also think that, if you’re concerned people are bound to think they’re too similar, change some small details that don’t require a lot of text editing but will help to remove some of the similarities. For instance, perhaps instead of describing her eyes as protuberant, you might describe her face more like the one shown in your banner – angular lines, flat shapes rather than friendly rounds with large, sunken eyes. It should help differentiate the two characters in peoples minds a little bit because protuberant is a word so commonly associated with Luna among Harry Potter fans.

Author's Response: you amaze me. :) really, thank you so much for taking the time to give these reviews, they are SO helpful--now i understand why you're only reviewing one of the stories i suggested; they're SO lengthy! and that's completely fine. thank you, again.

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