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Review:ten_oclock says:
Again, lets get the bad little bits over and done with shall we?

should have Shouldn't have? | uncomfteerabley Uncomfortably | was never knew how to help you. I never knew how to help you? No 'was' | Typo: she cried andc threw her AND | every times I was with you, were the times I can’t forget.
 'Every time (no S) I was with you - those were the times I can't forget' - gives it a bit more flow.

This was a REALLY good fic. I really think you've got Ron's character down, I really liked it. I think you captures Ron's personality well - the story was emotional enough that you knew he really felt something for her, but not being soooo emotional that I couldn't imagine him feeling that way. Not for the guy who has "the emotional range of a teaspoon!"

The lyrics fitted in really well with the story (you'd be amazed at how many people just randomly put lyrics in there with no reason!) and gave it a sense of breadth. I liked how they gave form to the story.

The start was REALLY good - kinda eerie and rather cool, and the was good as well. The 'It was out one year anniversary today Hermione' added a sense of time to it, and a sense of gravity to it. I really liked that. Said almost as an afterthought it really hit home!

Thanks for asking me to read your fics, it's been a pleasure!
Bethan

Author's Response: Thank you so much for doing this, I'm a bad speller lol. Thank you for giving me such a long review so i can correct myself on things i skip over. thank you so much



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